I'm learning to walk.
I fall at almost every step.
Every step is cheered and applauded.
I'm too slow for people.
But they wait for me with open, inviting arms.
The wait is a pleasure to them.
I'm a toddler in the making.
I learnt and forgot how to walk.
I almost fall at every step.
Every step evokes a rueful sigh.
I'm too slow for people.
They wait for me with an eye on their watches.
The wait is a burden to them.
I'm an octogenarian in the making.
***
This poem was listed as "Highly Commended" read for the month of October 2014 by Destiny Poet UK. http://www.destinypoets.co.uk/?page_id=107#comment-338270
I fall at almost every step.
Every step is cheered and applauded.
I'm too slow for people.
But they wait for me with open, inviting arms.
The wait is a pleasure to them.
I'm a toddler in the making.
I learnt and forgot how to walk.
I almost fall at every step.
Every step evokes a rueful sigh.
I'm too slow for people.
They wait for me with an eye on their watches.
The wait is a burden to them.
I'm an octogenarian in the making.
***
This poem was listed as "Highly Commended" read for the month of October 2014 by Destiny Poet UK. http://www.destinypoets.co.uk/?page_id=107#comment-338270
11 comments:
As for the title... "The Pregnant Walk".. "Pregnant" has a secondary meaning also.... besides the obvious one.
Pregnant also means "with a lot of nuances and meanings" , thoughtful, etc.... I'm depicting both the walks in a really thoughtful way... and presenting the
inherent thought behind them.. and hence the title...
This is to clarify the title. Quite a few of my friends came back how the title fitted in.
Hi Kamlesh,
I like this poem ... it reminds me of the circle of life. I have read humorous comparisons of young vs old where a few words are interchanged ... your poem remind me of this too.
Its uplifting and then sad ... but quite realistic of how things actually are at the different stages of life.
I like this poem ... I wondered though how the title fitted in...
Karen
The first name that came into my mind after reading ur short poem is Dr. Spencer Johnson.... if u c this from management point of view its resembles a manager...who was happy wking under known conditions and was jubilant abt himself and others but suddenly when the things around him changed....he started feeling scared. He was so much scared that The Scared Demon trapped him completely and he was surrounded with all the negative thoughts about himself.
Well my interpretation is from the in-mangement point of view of which we are r the characters....
but nevertheless a nice poem...keep going...
chao
Santoshree
Nice again, I like the surprise that always exists at the end of the poem
anil
Hey,
This one, too, is going to be a favorite one among all of your friends ( and hopefully all your readers and fans, once your collection is published ) I liked the way you arranged and presented it. Your Poetic Skills are Flying with this Pregnant Walk.
You know what, this is one of your poems, which does not need dictionary.. ( If I can understand this without it, I think everybody can )
Well done, Keep it up.
Best Regards,
Sunil
It is fantastic.
Rushikesh
Ummm, was that a "poet in the making" when you wrote this?
I can safely say the making is over - you are a smash hit!
Let the words flow...stay and sway!
Insightful ,concise and delightful. The perceptive reader may also very well discover the allusion to Shakespeare’s Seven Ages of Man.
Insightful ,concise and delightful. The perceptive reader may also very well discover the allusion to Shakespeare’s Seven Ages of Man.
Moving and strikingly beautiful. Keep it up.
It is the first lesson of every ones life and taught by mother. Thank you so much for share. A great job for every one to learn. In one of my bengali poem Mother’s affection (Mayer bhalobasa) i hve written so.
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