Sunday, March 27, 2005

I will. Would you?

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The curves of your back,

the contours of your neck,
the divine grace of your walk,
the mellifluous nectar in your talk.

The tacit lingo of your alcoholic eyes,
only my love-lorn heart could surmise.
I live a blissful eternity
in the blink of those eyes.

I, and this tranquil solitude.
Your thoughts and the moon-lit crescent.
I want time to stand still today
and prevent the sun's morning ascent.

In your blissful presence
my limbs go numb.
My tongue ceases to move
and you think I'm too dumb?

If hearts could sing,
my serenade would win by miles.
You'd then fathom my unspoken love,
when inundated with my hearty smiles.

Not just in the comfort of my quilt,
a castle for you, my love! I'll someday build.
I'll make you feel like a princess,
I'll shower you with my love, so boundless,
I'll make you wonder at my art,
when I'll make you a stranger in your own heart.
I'll be the reason you wake up every morn,
I'll be the reason you dream every night,
I'll be the reason you think every thought,
I'll be the reason you take every breath.

Would you?
Would you not love me just enough
to make me write my requiem
with a stylus,
dipped in bliss?

10 comments:

Kamlesh Acharya said...

Hey Kamlesh,

This one is lovely. I always dreamt of dedicating such a lovely creation to my love. But in my case, the creative and vocabulary restrictions apply...
I think, the would be Mrs. Kammo, is gonna be a lucky lady...

Well, you are right, this one is not that "dictionary friendly". So I enjoyed it very much.

After your first romantic poem, it took 26 poems to get the 2nd one. It's like, you are taking a new guard after hitting a century and staring afresh.

Let me tell you, it was my pleasure enjoying the journey between these 2 romantic poems. It has covered many shades of life and conveyed some extra-ordinary messages. Thanks very much for including me in your Bcc list for all your creations.... :-)

I wish you quickly complete 50 and go on and on and on......

Best Regards,
Sunil

Anonymous said...

Kams.....

Bahoot hi zyada romantic hai...

Subah subah isse padhne ke baad aur kuchh kaam nahi ho payega...

I fwded ur poem to my wud b…..

He asked me one qs….he asked whether u have any galfren…….

Even I have fwded the poem to another guy…

Seems everyone is just loving it……..

Amrita

Anonymous said...

quite romantic...

Lalit

Anonymous said...

You have outdone yourself.. Kammo..
Well done.. ;-)

Suds..

Anonymous said...

Good dude... becoming more and more romantic by the day ;-)))
Good luck with finding that someone!!

Poorvi

Anonymous said...

hi kamlesh,i dont know what to say about your writing skills coz im still getting to know them,but i can just assure you that had this been written for me, i would have been on the seventh heaven!!!:-)
so keep going
With luv,
Chaita

Anonymous said...

It's really amazing. can't take anymore of this or u'll put me in deep thoughts.i feel like I have butterflies in my stomach. gosh u write really well. I'm impressed

Anonymous said...

I liked the last stanza--the essence is there.

Good going. Hope to see you scale the literary ladder :-)

Anonymous said...

Beautiful.
The first two paragraphs gives description about her and then you start describing your feelings.

After this, you have described your feelings when you both meet.

Then, before asking her love, you also give out sort of reasons for why should she love you and then finally you ask her, "would you".

Nice continuity and a very good flow.

Anonymous said...

It is a beautiful poem.

Your talent never ceases to amaze me and reading your poetry always strikes a chord within me.

:-)